Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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because I agree with both sides,

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cardiovascular health and respiratory resistance,fatigue reduction,Increases strength, flexibility and coordination and more !!.

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you trust yourself. About video games, I am not convinced that a person plays a lot, I think it is okay to play as a distraction but many people get addicted to a game and it is harmful to their eyesight and health. As I mentioned before, I am on both sides and I think that dedicating yourself to your studies is still good, I think that studying is good anyway, because

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you learn new things that are useful for life

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, for me, any of the two options is good, but neither without exaggerating because EVERYTHING IN EXCESS IS BAD!...

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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