Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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because I agree with both sides,
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the best
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as the sport keeps you active,
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you, and it is healthy as well The
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cardiovascular health and respiratory resistance,fatigue reduction,Increases strength, flexibility and coordination and more !!.
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basketball and I love
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basketball I feel free definitely my thoughts are on the game and I forget everything. In
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I think that any sport is good , in
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team
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help you understand what a TEAM is and you
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make good friends and in individuals
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you trust yourself. About video games, I am not convinced that a person plays a lot, I think it is okay to play as a distraction but many people get addicted to a game and it is harmful to their eyesight and health. As I mentioned before, I am on both sides and I think that dedicating yourself to your studies is still good, I think that studying is good anyway, because
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you learn new things that are useful for life
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, for me, any of the two options is good, but neither without exaggerating because EVERYTHING IN EXCESS IS BAD!...
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