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Scholarships are a great opportunity to gain the study you like. What are the main advantages or disadvantages of studying abroad?

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I have always enjoyed planning, controlling and evaluating the
process
.
This
 applies to all aspects of life, both
study
 and work, as well as the daily routine. And, most importantly, I like to figure out the key factors that influence the flow of the
process
 and feel responsible for the outcome. Studying at university, I gained useful theoretical
knowledge
,
moreover
, I realised that I am interested in pursuing a career in
this
 field. After having experienced working, I only confirmed my interest and began to strive for greater things. But
this
 cannot be achieved without specific
knowledge
, skills and practical research. Master's programmes in Germany are particularly aimed at achieving the goals I have set because they are based not only on theoretical aspects but
also
 on practical and research activities. The
programme
 plans are
also
 built around innovative subjects with a relevant and fresh outlook, so they are not disconnected from reality and allow the students to keep up to date with developments in the world. These are key strengths for me in the educational
process
 and
that is
 why it is my goal to
study
 in
this
 country.
Moreover
, Germany is one of the most popular
study
 destinations for students from all over the world, which provides a unique opportunity for cultural exchange and for making new and useful professional and business contacts. I expect that after two years of diligent practical and research-based
study
 under the supervision of highly qualified professors, graduates will acquire all the necessary skills and incredible opportunities for professional growth and development. The “Business Intelligence and
Process
 Management” program at the “Hochschule für Wirtschaft und Recht Berlin” provides students with applied
knowledge
 at the interface of organization and technology. The course focuses on the use of Information Technology to effect improvements in organizational value creation. The degree
programme
 teaches the interdisciplinary
knowledge
 required for the development of sustainable solutions. After studying in
this
programme
, I will have gained goal-orientated analytic skills and be able to conceive and implement strategic and operative measures.
In addition
, the concept of
this
programme
 aimed at the implementation of Information Technology in business coincides completely with my interests, since my bachelor’s thesis was on "Improving information support for logistics activities of the forwarding company" and I would be very curious to continue my research in
this
 area.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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