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The “Global Supply
Chain
 and
Operations
 Management” program at the “Hochschule für Wirtschaft und Recht Berlin” provides students with a broad foundation in the principles of Business Administration with an international and application-orientated Global Supply
Chain
 and
Operations
 Management approach. The course allows students to work independently to develop an innovative approach to problem-solving. Studying in
this
programme
 will improve my analytical skills and will give me the development of goal-orientated operative and strategic measures and their implementation in new and broad-based contexts. The curriculum of
this
programme
 is
also
 an important advantage for me. I can highlight the correlation between the subjects in the course and those I studied at my home university; it is a logical continuation of my undergraduate
programme
.
In particular
, the subjects in the curriculum cover topics
such
 as
operations
 and projects, as well as broadening the understanding of different aspects of the global supply
chain
. It makes me very keen to study and will help me expand my horizons. The “Supply
Chain
 Management” program at the “SRH Hochschule Berlin” provides students with
knowledge
 about SCM and ERP systems and extends their
knowledge
 in international law, logistics and process management.
In addition
, it allows becoming proficient in current topics
such
 as business intelligence, SCM 4.0, big data and
operations
 research. After completing
this
programme
, I will gain an intensive insight into global supply chains and develop my communication, negotiation and presentation skills in projects. It will
also
 help me design, manage and analyse complex value chains.
This
programme
also
 correlates with my bachelor's degree and is a logical extension of it. One of the main strengths of
this
 course is that the curriculum includes the creation of a company project as well as an internship. It is an incredible opportunity to apply the
knowledge
 acquired in practice under the expert guidance of highly qualified professors and to receive relevant feedback. Being part of an international company, I realise that big business requires not only broader and deeper theoretical
knowledge
 but
also
 more practical skills
such
 as data analysis, strategic thinking, operational planning and decision-making.
This
 is vital to
further
 promote me and develop my career on the global stage. All
this
 helped me to make my choices and understand that these three programmes are fully aligned with my goals.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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