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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The advantages of the promotion of the products are often a topic to debate. While some
people
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 believe that advertising becomes more and more prevalent so that
people
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 don't pay attention to
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, I, like many others, argue that it is crucial for the company to easily persuade
customers
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 to buy their
goods
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. On the one hand,
people
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 believe that advertising now become common to promote new things. The main reason for
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 is that it becomes saturated with a large number of promotion campaigns made by
companies
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.
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,
people
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 are not interested in their
goods
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 and they don't want to buy these things.
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, more and more advertisements are not invested by the
companies
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 so it is poor content and not attracted potential
customers
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.
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, others argue that advertising is successful to make
people
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 buy things by persuading them to buy those. For one thing, huge
companies
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 have a team that
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 research the demand of the
customers
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.
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, they make appropriate promotions to approach potential buyers to buy their
goods
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. To be more precise,
companies
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 originally carry out a survey to understand the need of
customers
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, create a logical advertisement and consider the price affordably.
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, their promotions are unique and become more attractive for came-across
people
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 to buy their products. In general,
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 advertising nowadays is believed to be prevalent and cannot make
people
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 pay attention to it, it is a crucial role to help many
companies
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 to promote their
goods
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 and make the potential
customers
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 believe in the advantages of the
goods
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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