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Nowadays, many people prefer to buy famous brand of clothes, cars and other items. What are the reasons for this? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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The purchase of
items
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 from producers with well-known labels has become a popular practice for many individuals. I believe
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a result of peer influence and heavy advertisements of these
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. I
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 think
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 is a negative trend because it could lead to
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 getting involved in crime to get money to buy these materials. There are some reasons why most
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 like buying branded
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 of all, is the influence of other
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 on them. By
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 I mean when
people
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 see their friends and peers buying and wearing designer
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, they
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 want to do the same to meet up with the standards set by peer groups.
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, is the effect of advertisement on the human mind. Most of these big brands know the effect of advertisement on
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 and as
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, they keep sponsoring television advertisements and radio jingles because they believe the more you see their
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, the more you get attracted to them.
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, most
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 go after
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 they gave seen advertised than the ones they never saw.
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 trend is a negative one because it leads to
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 engaging in all forms of unhealthy activities to get the funds to buy these
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, buying these popular brands requires more money and because of the desire to get it, many
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 will go the extra mile and could commit a crime to get
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 money. Some
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 will even go shoplifting those
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 because of the desire to get
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.
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, some of the shoplifters that have been caught and interviewed were found mostly stealing designer
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. In conclusion, many individuals are buying designer
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 because of the influence
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 their age group and the
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 of advertisements done by the manufacturers of these
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. I believe
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 is a negative development because it makes
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 commit crimes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Brand Loyalty: Consumer preference for a particular brand that results in continual purchase over time.
  • Status Symbol: An item that signifies one's social or economic status.
  • Prestige: Widespread respect and admiration felt for someone or something on the basis of a perception of their achievements or quality.
  • Quality Assurance: The maintenance of a desired level of quality in a service or product.
  • Innovation: The introduction of new ideas, methods, or products.
  • Marketing Strategy: A business’s plan for reaching prospective consumers and turning them into customers of their products or services.
  • Consumerism: The preoccupation of society with the acquisition of consumer goods.
  • Peer Pressure: Influence from members of one's peer group to behave in a way that is acceptable or similar to them.
  • Advertising Influence: The effect that advertising has on consumer decisions.
  • Materialism: A tendency to consider material possessions and physical comfort as more important than spiritual values.
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