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Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are theadvantages and disadvantages for the child having a large number of toys?

#parents #children #toys #theadvantages #child
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human
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 being, the
children
is
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 not an exception.
Parents
 nowadays have more tendency to buy a large
amount
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 of
toys
 for their
children
, which can lead to a lot of consequences, neither beneficial nor unbeneficial. Almost all
parents
 have a conception that if their
children
 possess
a great deal of
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a lot of
many
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toys
 to play with, it will automatically boost the
child
's creativity as well as their concentration.
Let
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 take puzzles or legos
for
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 example, both of it all related to the ability of logical thought as well as
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 development because
it
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they
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 can help the
child
 to have
chance
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a chance
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 to practice their brain by trying to memorise or analyze some
stuffs
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stuff
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 there.
In addition
,
parents
also
 want to stop the
child
 from disturbing them while they are keeping pace with working or in a private space. The kid will be kept busy with their plaything
isolated
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their
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children
 to immerse in
such
 a society
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of princess
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princess
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princesses
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,
heros
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heroes
 or even ridiculously monsters.
Beside
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 that, being under too many
toys
 can affect negatively
to
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apply
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children
's
developing
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development
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. Kids who have lots of
toys
 are more likely to spend most of their time playing
indoor
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indoors
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, without interacting with their
counterpart
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counterparts
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 or even they feel that it is unessential to build
the
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 relationship with each other. It can adversely impact
on
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their social skill which can lead to a bunch of cons. Not to mention that, if the
child
have
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 too many choices to select what they find
interest
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in
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, they will easily
unappreciate
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unappreciated
 the value of the
toys
; they don't even care about
its
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their
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existence
existance
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existence
. In conclusion, it is clear that the
disadvantanges
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disadvantages
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outweigh
outweight
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outweigh
 the advantages;
as a
result
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parents
 must have paid more attention to their
children
's condition;
therefore
 they will be able to adjust the number of
toys
 they give to their
children
.
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