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Many people use distance-learning program to study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the benefits as much as attending college or university. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, Technology is advanced now and new learners will prefer to distance-learning study at home on online based while other individuals believe that it does not bring benefits
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 of attending school and college. I disagree with
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 notion, It is good for students to attend classes at any time with the help of the internet I will discuss in the upcoming paragraphs.
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 with the disagreement, These days a large factor of students will not go to university because their authority will provide an online connection with their tutors at home. To explain, All developed nations will serve
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 facility for all their new hires due to they will think it beneficial to their region's development and its good effect on trainees' research growth because they find so much information on internet-based.
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, In the USA lawmakers will declare that their undergraduate trainees will be allowed anything they want about related to their studies and they will promote online lectures all over the globe and their good effect on their country's recession.
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, studying at home is good for beginners
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 attending university. To commence with the agreement, Colleges now
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 invisible to their students because online development will be rising day by day and some educational institutions will
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decline with
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 effect.
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, All peoples follow the rules of the distance learning programs and they will forget their traditional debate pattern and their nation's old schools will be broken down its bad impact on their country's old values.
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, In Germany government will announce new laws to related their student's studies they said all beginner is important to attend offline classes in college because they will recover their age learning pattern and it is good for all countries.
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, It is an essential part of life to attend an academy on a regular based and its beneficial impact on the economy. In conclusion,
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online connection is good for pupils and it is easy to connect everywhere and for hours.
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, Schools life is always doing a good role to develop a national value and it is good to attend educational institution lecturers.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • - Flexibility: the quality of being adaptable or variable.
  • - Convenience: the state of being able to do something easily with little effort and no trouble.
  • - Geographical barriers: physical or political boundaries that separate locations, making communication and travel difficult.
  • - Accessibility: easy to approach, reach, enter, speak with, or use; obtainable.
  • - Affordability: the state of being cheap enough for people to be able to buy.
  • - Self-discipline: the ability to control one's feelings and overcome one's weaknesses.
  • - Time management: the process of planning and exercising conscious control over the amount of time spent on specific activities.
  • - Social interaction: the process by which we act and react to those around us.
  • - Networking opportunities: chances to meet people who might be useful to know, especially in your job.
  • - Extracurricular activities: activities pursued in addition to the normal course of study.
  • - Quality of education: the standard or level of education.
  • - Rigorous: extremely thorough and accurate.
  • - Technological barriers: obstacles related to technology that prevent people from accomplishing a task.
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