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Summarize and Compare the underground railway systems across London, Paris, Tokyo, Washington DC, Kyoto and Los Angeles

The table shows the details regarding the underground
railway
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systems
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 in six cities. London has the oldest underground
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system
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 among the six cities. It was opened in the
year
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 1863, and it is already lye years old. Paris is the
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 oldest, which was opened in the
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 1900.
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 in Tokyo, Washington DC, and Kyoto. Los Angeles has the newest underground
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system
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 and was only opened in the
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 2001. In terms of the size of the
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systems
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, London, For certain, has the largest underground
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systems
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. It has 394 kilometres of the route in total, which is nearly twice as large as the
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 in Paris. Kyoto,
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. It only has 11 kilometres of route, which is more than 30 times less than that of London. Interestingly, Tokyo, which only has 155 kilometres of route, serves the greatest
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 of
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, at 1927 million
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. The
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 in Paris has the
second
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 of
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, at 1191 million
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passengers
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 per
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. The smallest underground
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system
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, Kyoto, serves the smallest
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 of
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 per
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 as predicted. In conclusion, the underground
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systems
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 in different cities vary a lot in the site of the
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, the
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 and the age of the
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.

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