University is the only way to success. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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While
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some people think going to the academy is the only course to success and it is completely useful for children other experts and the public believe
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way is not the only form to improve and be successful in the imminent.Let me discuss my opinion in the following paragraphs.
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with, I should say that since the citizenry has different views and opinions towards each other, there has always been disagreement on
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matter.
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, some citizens think that all young heirs have to go to the academy and it is the best way for them because in the imminent all of them need to improve themself and
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their country and unless science they do not can do it.
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, they agree it is helpful for all humans and young
babes
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should improve their knowledge to make a future.
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a result, The academy is the best place for children.
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,if I want to talk about the mindset and beliefs of the second category,I have to say that they think any person can make the best future in any way and some of the citizens are made of for some work and they are very well on that work so they do not need to study.
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to the mentioned ,items a lot of experts
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every society needs to have a different person for a different job and
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topic is extremely necessary to keep any society so do not study everyone.
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, some children don't enjoy university and we should not force them to go to university so it is not true.
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, some babies like to do exercise and some kids are happy with doing music or work. In conclusion,if I want to express my opinion I should say since I have already researched and read about
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topic,I have to say that both groups are somewhat right but the best action is to trust the experts and I disagree with
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action of thinking and I suppose every person should have the right to choose because there are many ways to succeed.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multifaceted
  • foundation
  • specialized knowledge
  • critical thinking
  • pivotal
  • online learning platforms
  • vocational training
  • flexible
  • accessible
  • real-world experience
  • networking
  • entrepreneurial ventures
  • prohibitive
  • personal fulfillment
  • contribution
  • continuous learning
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