Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy in life? What other things in life can make people happy? Happiness is crucial to live good and prosperous?

Happiness is the key
of
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successful
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life
. There is a quote which is quite popular, '
Money
can not buy
happiness'
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happiness
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.
However
in
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reality,
money
can
purchased
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all the amenities which can make a
person
ecstatic. In
this
essay, I will discuss how a lot of
money
make
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an individual joyful and will discuss
about
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other things which can be a reason for
individual's
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happiness
hapiness
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happiness
.
Nevertheless
, I will discuss the contribution of
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happiness
hapiness
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happiness
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in
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an
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individual's
indvidual's
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individual's
good and prosperous
life
. Nowadays, people are more inclined to
luxarious
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luxurious
life
,
human
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a human
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being who has
ability
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to avail all
kind
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of
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luxury
luxary
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luxury
is the happiest
person
.
Thus
, wealthy men are buying happiness in terms of
modern
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the modern
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car
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cars
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, big
house
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houses
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and international
vacation
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. So, it is doubtless to consider that
money
can provide bliss and joy.
On the other hand
, there are several things which
has
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major
contribution
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behind
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a peaceful
life
,
such
as
sound
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body and mind, creativity, and the emotional bond with family and friends. There is no doubt that
money
can not
by
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buy
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these things.
For instance
, an old rich man who is suffering from
serious
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chronic health
problem
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could not enjoy his
life
in
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his terms , there is no use
of
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for
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the millions of
pound
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pounds
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of
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his bank account. If a
person
want
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to live a
prosporous
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prosperous
life
, he has to nurture his inner self to enjoy his
life
fullest.
Happy
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person
can be
most
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a most
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productive
person
, he can easily concur any obstacles and can solve
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the problem
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problem
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through proper understanding as he can use his brain wisely. To conclude,
although
money
can buy mortal
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things
thinghs
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things
which make a
person
happy for
short
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time,
but
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if a
person
wants
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live his
life
fullest , he has to give equal importance
on
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physical and mental health, so that he can live a blissful
life
.
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