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some people believe that mordern technology encourages more social behaviour, others believe it has made people less socialable. give views and opinion

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Technology has changed our lives drastically over the
last
 few years. It has a huge impact on our everyday work and life. There are many views on the impact of automation. A group of people are of the view that modern technology
.
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 For ,example smartphones and other applications have made people more sociable. While the group of people are of the opinion that it has made the public less sociable. According to my personal point of view, I support the former. The following arguments will prove my point. Everyone is obsessed and addicted to social media. Technological devices like phones and smartphones are commonly seen in everyone's hands. The social media platforms like Facebook,Twitter, Instagram etc are a medium of entertainment.
Such
 social media apps
also
 support sharing. Videos and photos with anyone sitting around the world. It
also
 has made communication easy.
One
 does not even need to call the person. They can just react to the message and the other person can reply to it. the population can pass messages, pictures, documents, drafts,etc. to
one
 another in a fraction of a
second
. It
also
 helps to make new friends and meet new communities.
Also
, it helped to maintain old friendships and relationships. Though, as listed above are the advantages of machinery. There are many disadvantages as well. The emotional connection
one
 feels when physically talking with someone is gone. the crowd have started creating fake life and personality to just gain popularity. No
one
 is living in reality. They are a whole different person online.
This
 has adversely affected youngsters. Everyone tries to form fake relations. Later, some families get emotionally hurt by it. It has created a sense of non-trust in the minds of the folk. In Conclusion, technology is making society more sociable. But it
also
 has made the crowd change their true selves. It might have become easier to contact anyone, anytime. It has made it easy to connect with the population. But the difference between online and offline gets ignored.
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