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Nowadays, distance-learning programs have gained popularity, but some people argue that online courses can never be as good as those taken at a college or university in person. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Due to Covid, more and more universities and college
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distance
 lessons. Certain people believe that physical courses are better, and will never be substituted by online's
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. I think that in
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 of teaching efficiency, face-to-face classes are definitely one step ahead, but
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learning
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learning
 has several benefits in other aspects.
To begin
 with, students that study in the classroom are more focused
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 the lesson.To explain, pupils that attend online lessons could be distracted by numerous factors.
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,in the morning, students usually tend to take classes
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bed, and
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will decrease their attention.
Moreover
, during the lesson, pupils can use their computer to do other things
such
 as shopping and watching
news
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.
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 the class in person, the teacher is in front of the students
hence
 they will feel pressured and,
as a result
, they become more concentrated.
On the other hand
,
distance
 courses
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 excellent for
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determinate
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 of people.To elaborate,
individuals
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 that would like to strike a balance between work and study,
online
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 course should be suitable for them, and they will consider it greater
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 the physical one because it
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 their need.
For instance
, a person
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to
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work at 5 pm, and the lesson starts at 5.05, in
this
 case is very
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comfortable
confortable
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comfortable
 for him to take the class online. To summarize, I partly agree that
distance
 courses can never be as good as those
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 due to
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 efficiency.But
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analyzing
analizing
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analysing
 an issue should be considered
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 perspectives.
Therefore
, for certain people
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 course is great as well for the reasons mentioned above.
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