Good education is more important for academic success than individual ability. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Two individual students from two different educational institutes definitely show differences in their scholastic performances even though their IQ is relatively similar.
This
provokes a myriad of concerns regarding what will influence students to achieve successful school performances which is the outcome of conventional
education
yet, to be meant as an entry requirement for their higher
education
or involvement in the workforce. As per my knowledge and experience,
education
means things a person learns by being taught. Since early childhood, people are taught basic to specific knowledge about how to survive in the world in
this
day and age. Simple mathematics
such
as summing up, division, and multiplication are important for day-to-day life. General knowledge of the surrounding is
also
taught using subjects
such
as environment, history, and social studies. And
also
, some areas of disciplines, rules and regulations, and something about the legal system are
also
included.
Education
is meant to be more systematic and it is related to environmental
exposure
which is intentionally created at the school. One can declare that good
education
is something like spoon-feeding rather than allowing learning by themselves. Individual abilities can be defined as inborn capacities or genetically determined factors that contribute to an individual to
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in their life. More specifically, they can be called personnel life skills.
for example
, personality, communication, problem-solving, negotiation, emotional intelligence, self-motivation, flexibility and time management. You may find significant variations among students when it comes to these capabilities. The reason is they are more genetically imprinted qualities but,
exposure
can
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sharper the strength or less
exposure
may weaken the qualities still, they are capacities of individuals. What psychologists believe is not only that inborn capacities are important but
also
,
exposure
to various stimuli in terms of environmental
exposure
is important to succeed in learning. To encapsulate, my stance is neither, good
education
nor, personal skills are key to access but overall school educational system targets
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every student individually in order to shape their behaviour.
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