It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion?

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argue that different levels of ability, which
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inevitable no matter how hard they have trained, while others follow the opposite side. In my view,
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a professional in many aspects, I partly agree with the former argument.
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expectations which can be explained by the appearance of many specialized academies.
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to practice directly with expertise,
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, they still could master
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many skills that they have learned before.
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, I believed that there are some specific skills that no matter how hard
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are, they still cannot learn it. The main reason for
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is that some talents are probably inherited via genres, which give individuals a facility for certain skills that allow them to excel, while the students who
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talent never manage to reach a comparable level in their whole life. One strong
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statement is that there are a host of students around the world, but just a few of them can be
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from others,
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as Messi as a professional football player or Ronaldo.
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, without natural gifts, it is insurmountable to reach
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the level of those
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at the top of the world.
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, if children with natural talents are not received the suitable
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systems
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to exploit and develop their gifts, the successful will never come with them. In conclusion, because of the development of education
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, children can learn whatever they want;
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, without talents, which can be inherited through mutation, it is impossible for them to stand at the top of certain professions.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Innate talent
  • Nurture
  • Prodigy
  • Proficiency
  • Deliberate practice
  • Physiological factors
  • Grit
  • Perseverance
  • Cultural norms
  • Structured training
  • Physical predisposition
  • Natural aptitude
  • Dedicated training
  • Societal influence
  • Passion
  • Genetic endowment
  • Skill acquisition
  • Expertise
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Mastery
  • Cognitive abilities
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