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It is cruel to keep animals in zoos. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#animals #zoos
According to animal experts,
zoos
 are enclosures with adequate facilities to conserve, care for and breed different species of
animals
, especially wild and exotic ones, which can be visited by the public. In
zoos
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 there are wild
animals
 in danger of extinction and
also
 exotic
animals
 that can capture people's attention. Despite the fact that zoology scholars say that
zoos
 are recreational
centers
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 for human beings, nobody thinks about
animals
. They will really feel happy to live in a place that may or may not be their habitat. In
zoos
 abroad, in countries like the United
States
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 there are
animals
 that are in danger of extinction, as well as
zoos
 where
animals
 are well cared for, there are
also
zoos
 where they mistreat
animals
 and
also
 sacrifice them. In
Bolivia
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 there are
also
zoos
 in the city of Santa Cruz, La Paz and Tarija, where unfortunately there are
animals
 that are not so well cared for and due to lack of
attention
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 they lose their lives. In conclusion, I consider that it is not appropriate to have
zoos
 because the
animals
 are confined to small spaces and cannot enjoy nature as they should. the human being is selfish and does not think about the damage that can be caused by a moment of entertainment or distraction. It would be nice to put ourselves in their place and
thus
 know that it is not nice to be locked up. I particularly disagree with
zoos
 because it is a form of animal torture.
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