It is cruel to keep animals in zoos. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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According to animal experts,
zoos
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are enclosures with adequate facilities to conserve, care for and breed different species of
animals
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, especially wild and exotic ones, which can be visited by the public. In
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there are wild
animals
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in danger of extinction and
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exotic
animals
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that can capture people's attention. Despite the fact that zoology scholars say that
zoos
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are recreational
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for human beings, nobody thinks about
animals
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. They will really feel happy to live in a place that may or may not be their habitat. In
zoos
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abroad, in countries like the United
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there are
animals
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that are in danger of extinction, as well as
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where
animals
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are well cared for, there are
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where they mistreat
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and
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sacrifice them. In
Bolivia
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there are
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in the city of Santa Cruz, La Paz and Tarija, where unfortunately there are
animals
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that are not so well cared for and due to lack of
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they lose their lives. In conclusion, I consider that it is not appropriate to have
zoos
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because the
animals
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are confined to small spaces and cannot enjoy nature as they should. the human being is selfish and does not think about the damage that can be caused by a moment of entertainment or distraction. It would be nice to put ourselves in their place and
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know that it is not nice to be locked up. I particularly disagree with
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because it is a form of animal torture.
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