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Some say that news has no connection with most people’s lives and it is a waste of time for most of us to read newspapers and watch television news programs. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many
people
 opine that
news
 does not have any association with the
lives
 of individuals and investing tile towards getting insights about various current affairs either through print or mass media is a
completely
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 waste of time.
This
 essay disagrees with
aforementioned
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 notion because
news
 helps in creating awareness and
also
 aids in taking
decisions
 promptly. It is an irrefutable fact that
,
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 there are a plethora of events happening across the globe which might have an impact on the
lives
 of contemporary
people
, and it is essential to know about these events through newspapers or
news
 channels. So, that members of society can stay aware and alert. To illustrate ,
news
 about the recession in
US
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the US
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 certainly may not be important
news
 for the public in India.
However
, a recession in foreign land definitely impacts the home country's economy directly or indirectly.
Therefore
,
news
 programs and papers are crucial to circulate knowledge and wisdom.if t
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Moreover
Morevover
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Moreover
,
people
 from all walks of
lives
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life
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 can take intelligent
decisions
 with the help and support of
news
 circulating platforms. Different
people
 in various domains
such
 as business owners, students,salaried employees , housewives and even government officials can take
intellectual
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decisions
 in their own area of work if they are updated and have knowledge about affairs happening all over the world with the help of
news
.
For example
, during COVID-19 righteous
decisions
 were taken to protect the masses from the pandemic
this
 was only possible due to
news
 platforms.
Hence
, decision-making turns out to be effective and efficient due to the variety of
news
 sources. No doubt, due to cut-throat competition in
news
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the news
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 industry ,numerous illogical and irrelevant
news
 creates chaos in society,
this
 can not oversee the advantages that
news
 channels and newspapers
brings
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 into the
lives
 of common man and women. To conclude,
news
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the news
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 certainly has a strong connection with
people
’s
lives
 as
this
 provides various information and
also
 supports individuals to make mindful
decisions
.
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