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Plastic bags, plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damage does plastics do to the environment? What can be done by government and individuals to solve this problem?

#plastic #bags #bottles #environment #damage #plastics #government #individuals
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In the
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midst
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amidst
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midst
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 of
world
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the world
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 fighting against different environmental issues,
plastic
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 waste is one of the most discussed issues which needs some solution. The resulting problems caused due to
plastic
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 will be discussed with some suggestions to resolve
it
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 in
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Plastic
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 is a very difficult material to decompose and takes years to self-decompose while it causes harm to nature in different ways. As it is available in
market
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 at a cheaper rate and is easily accessible,
people
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 consume it daily for their smallest tasks like purchasing
grocery
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,
to carry
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 things from one place to another and more. After
usage
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,
people
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 throw it carelessly which at times is eaten by cows mistakenly, thereby affecting their health. Or is found thrown near water bodies which not only
pollutes
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 water but
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releases
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 harmful chemicals putting the life of marine animals
at
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 jeopardy. If
this
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plastic
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 is burnt, the harmful gases adversely affect the ozone layer, causing global warming.
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 alarming problem can be addressed only when the government join hands with its citizens to find solutions. Making some stringent rules to curb the
usage
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 of
plastic
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 is the
first
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 step towards awareness which can be taken at
policy making
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 level.
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, the seriousness of
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 problem should be explained to
people
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 in a creative manner so that can encourage them to stop
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usage
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. Government should encourage innovative solutions from the youth as well as support their projects.
People
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 can contribute by advertently using the substitute
of
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for
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plastic
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 like using paper bags to carry
grocery
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. Social media is one of the most powerful
tool
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tools
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 in today’s time to promote as well as encourage others by sharing videos n pictures of themselves using beautiful paper bags over
plastic
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. In conclusion, though it is difficult to completely cease the
usage
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 of
plastic
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 , with the right steps and
right
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 choice, we can at least reduce the pollution caused due to it.
A responsible
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citizen
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citizens
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 and the country can protect
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mother earth with their vigilant efforts.
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