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In some countries, more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this question?

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In recent years,
people
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 around the world have become learning and interested in the building or houses where
people
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 lived in the past. There are various reasons to be interested in past circumstances. In the following paragraph, these reasons will be discussed in detail. Nowadays, our countries have many facilities to provide and have more buildings than before. Some
people
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 might wonder and start questions about the environment of
people
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 in those eras which leads to an interest in history. There were abundant purposes to learning,
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, someone might watch movies that reminded them of the past in their countries or someone might be fond of agriculture as the old building.
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, how can they reach these questions?
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 it seems hard to discover their interests because it's long gone, it was possible. Our world has much research about
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history and it is easier to learn on the internet.
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, some countries that have
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 aged building has tourist attraction in each country to convey not only story about past era environment but
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 provide information and knowledge to someone who is interested. In fact, they can discover their question about the history of the house and building from pictures in the past,
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 maybe they can ask their parents when they were young for more surprising pieces of information as well. There is much research to provide their curiosity. The above research can achieve their curiosity, though it was nothing to prove.
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,
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 should have various sources of information to answer
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 interesting questions as well.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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