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Some parents believe that learning mathematics at school is redundant and should not betaught. Others belive that it should remain a foundation subject whether or not it is used later in life

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Teaching
mathematics
 has become a debatable subject among
parents
 these days. While some
parents
 argue that
mathematics
 is not necessary
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 and should be removed from the curriculum, others maintain that it should be compulsory even if it is not required in the future.
This
 essay will discuss both views in depth. I strongly believe learning
mathematics
 is vital because it improves students’ intellect and aids in
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 of their potential. A growing number of
parents
 are of the view that learning
mathematics
 in various academic institutions should not be encouraged since it does not benefit the child in any way.
This
 is because the skill gained from
this
 subject is now done seamlessly by electronic gadgets,
such
 as simple calculators, mobile phones and computers. Operations done using these devices are faster and more reliable when compared to ones done by humans. Again, having
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mathematics
 is not a prerequisite for most jobs when children complete their studies.
For instance
, if a student eventually becomes a social worker, there will be no instance where he will be required to put his knowledge in algebra to use.
On the other hand
, other
parents
 argue that all children should be taught
mathematics
, regardless of its use when they become adults. They hold
this
 view because of the positive impact of the course on children’s intellect. Teaching pupils to solve problems in trigonometry, matrices and many others stimulates
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young minds to think outside their comfort zone.
This
 broadens their developing brains, making it easier to learn other subjects.
Furthermore
, young people with good potential in
mathematics
 can be identified. They are guided by their tutors which enables them
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 into professions
such
 as engineering, where they excel. In conclusion, the role of
mathematics
 in education today continues to be arguable.
Although
 some
parents
 believe it is not essential and should be omitted from school programs, I think it increases students’ intelligence and helps us identify their strengths.
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