The gap between the rich and the poor is becoming wider; the rich are becoming richer, and the poor are getting even poorer. What problems can the situation cause? What can be done to reduce this gap?

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is increasing more and more.
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is caused by some factors and it should be solved by some effective solutions. There are some reasons why the gap between rich and poor nations is up.
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. They will forever
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or difficult to improve.
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to improve
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which can not do it. Fortunately, there are some measures that can be taken to prevent
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system and help people
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abroad to update new
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a developed
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have a good
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and lack of
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. To solve
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education
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  • economic disparity
  • crime rates
  • wealth inequality
  • social segregation
  • education gap
  • affluent
  • mortality rates
  • uneven access
  • hopelessness
  • disenfranchisement
  • progressive taxation
  • redistribute
  • quality education
  • social programs
  • economic disadvantage
  • higher wages
  • entrepreneurship
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