Some people think parents should supervise their children's activities closely, while others believe children should have more freedom. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

One of the social concerns today relates to

parents

’

supervision

of their

children

.

While

it is widely believed that

parents

should take control of their

children

closely, others believe

parents

should give more freedom to their

children

. I’m going to discuss these opposing points of view. In my opinion, we should keep the balance between the two notions. (không sai, nhưng chung chung vậy thì điểm thấp) On the one hand, it is argued that

parents

’

supervision

of their young is important and necessary. The main reason is that

kids

are unable to protect themselves in some likely dangerous situations. It is

also

possible to say that they are not mature and knowledgeable enough to keep themselves away from dangers that are present everywhere around them. One good illustration of

this

is that a

child

may not know a bowl of boiling soup on the table is hot and can cause burning. They possibly put their fingers into the bowl and get a burn. Another reason is nowadays there is an increasing issue of

children

kidnapping crime.

For example

, when a

child

is playing in the park without his

parents

’

supervision

, some bad people can approach the

child

and allure him with sweets or something, and

then

kidnap the

child

. The criminals do that just because they want to take ransom from the

child

’s

parents

or they may sell the poor

child

overseas. So if the

parents

always keep an eye on their

children

’s activities, it will be safer for the

kids

.

On the other hand

, it is strongly believed by others that

children

should have more freedom to do almost whatever they want. People often have

this

opinion because they think the best way to learn everything is from both bad and good experiences that would help

children

grow independently and wisely. A second point is that freedom would encourage and enhance a

child

’s creativity, problem-solving skills and taking

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. A particularly good example here is a

child

who is playing with his peers in the playground, and sometimes there is a quarrel with other

kids

. If the

parents

do not intervene in the

kids

’ business, the

child

will learn how to communicate, and negotiate to get what he wants. He may be a loser, but at least after that, he can learn to control his bad feelings. In conclusion, it is commonly thought that

parents

should supervise their

children

carefully meanwhile others assume that

parents

should give their

children

more space to

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develop

naturally and independently. Personally, I tend to believe that

parents

need to keep a balance between too much

supervision

and not

to

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control at all. Let

children

grow up naturally and learn new things with genuine curiosity about the world and sometimes deal with certain harsh situations. But it does not mean that

parents

do not accompany their

kids

in any circumstances, let

them

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alone when they need help. I believe

parents

would learn how to raise and educate their

children

through a long challenging and interesting journey to be smart and the best

parents

.