Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In
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day and age, it is believed that no matter under what conditions and intentions a crime has happened, for any kind of it, a fixed sentence should exist while some others think any case should be taken under consideration personally. I argue the
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must be various for offenders. The reasons will be outlined in
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essay. On the one hand, the notion of some citizens believing the fine should be fixed for all lawbreakers. In their thinking, if there is no fixed
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for lawbreakers, it will lead to injustice. If the punishments are equal for everyone, people are aware of the consequences of their actions when they do something wrong, and
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prevents them from breaking the law.
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at the University of Toronto in Canada in 2017 have shown that if the consequences of wrongdoing are known in advance, the probability of committing a crime is reduced by 20% compared to when the consequences are not known.
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, some people suggest that the motivation and circumstances behind any act of breaking the law should be investigated independently. Sometimes an individual has committed a crime but they neither meant to do it nor did they commit it willingly.
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, sometimes a
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has an emergency patient in his car and has to go through a red light because of the patient's condition. The
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should not be equal to the
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of the
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who crossed the red light because of his desire under normal circumstances. In the nutshell,
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equality of
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can reduce the number of crimes and injustice,
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one should pay attention to the intention of the
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when doing her work, especially in special situations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fixed punishments
  • consistency
  • predictability
  • deter crime
  • potential offenders
  • streamline
  • judicial process
  • bias
  • corruption
  • complexity
  • human behavior
  • circumstances
  • justice system
  • intent
  • remorse
  • socio-economic background
  • rehabilitate offenders
  • recidivism rates
  • flexible punishment systems
  • inconsistencies
  • perceived injustices
  • public trust
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