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Some say that news has no connection with most people’s lives and it is a waste of time for most of us to read newspapers and watch television news programs. Do you agree or disagree?

#say #news #connection #people’s #lives #waste #time #newspapers #television #programs
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Nowadays,
people
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 have connected to each other because of many things, one of them
is
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 the
news
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. Some
people
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 claim that
news
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 is not essential because it is not connected with
people
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's lives.
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, reading newspapers or watching television
for
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apply
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the
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apply
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news
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 could waste our time. I totally disagree with
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 statement because
news
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 provides much
information
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 and could clarify false
information
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.
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 of all, the
news
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 gives us a lot of useful
information
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 which could broaden
people
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's insight.
Information
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 provided by
news
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 could give and improve
people
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's knowledge and perspective.
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,
people
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 should try to read or watch the
news
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 every day, especially before doing their activities.
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,
news
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 about a riot in Kanjuruhan Stadium in Malang. Many TV stations share
this
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 with their audiences to show what actually happened in there.
As a result
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,
people
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 around the world have the same perspective about the actual situation.
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,
news
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 in the newspaper or TV
also
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 could clarify the fake
news
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 found on the internet. The
news
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 released or broadcasted by trusted
news
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 agencies has passed some phases, including supervision by the editor.
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, the case of the presidential elections in Indonesia in 2014. There was a lot of
information
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 about cheating conducted by one of the candidates on Twitter.
However
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,
this
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information
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 was fake and was clarified by a trusted
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news agent
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. In conclusion, the
news
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 shared with us through newspapers or TV is vital. It can improve our knowledge and it can clarify false
news
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 made by irresponsible
people
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.
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