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Advertising is influencing people more and more. Is this a positive or a negative trend? Give your opinion and examples.

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There has been an increasing trend caused by
advertisements
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 influencing
people
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's lives and I would argue that while
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 trend has many negative results, it can have some positive features as well. With regard to the advantages of widespread
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, human life has benefited from
advertisements
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 in various ways. It is undeniable that it has turned into a tremendous industry which has made millions of job opportunities for
people
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 around the world.
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,
advertisements
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 are usually used for promoting public awareness as well,
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, government transmit much information about environmental issues and energy consumption through
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 to society which has had considerable effects on
people
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's lifestyle. Many
people
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 have been aware of the disaster called resource depletion through
ads
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 and have improved their consumption habits in consuming water, electricity, gas and oil in everyday life.
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, as a matter of fact, widespread
ads
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 can have many negative influences on societies.
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, they have exacerbated consumerism among
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 example, most youngsters have been fashion victims that strictly follow the latest trends, spending a lot of money and time on shopping introduced merchandise.
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, there are few conservative rules on
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 and they may have harmful effects on some age groups
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 as children. Advertising junk food containing fat and sugar may encourage children to pester their parents to buy and regrettably, would result in child obesity and poor health in kids. In conclusion, the growing trend of
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 affecting our lives is a fact that has had both advantages and disadvantages for
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society.
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  • Blue light
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