Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. Discussion both sides and give your opinion
Few citizens opine that ecological concerns have to be clarified globally
while
others argue that it can be rectified from
the country itself. I believe that both are essential for Change preposition
by
a
sustainable development so I will be exhibiting my idea in the upcoming paragraphs.
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To begin
with
certainly it is important to conduct a global committee to make sure Add a comma
with,
environment
is protected. Because only with the involvement of Correct article usage
the environment
United
Nations the remaining countries will take the Correct article usage
the United
scheme’s
seriously. Global warming is a great threat across the globe only through addressing Unnecessary verb
scheme
this
issues
nationally it might not be solved Fix the agreement mistake
issue
hence
it is important for making
a new set of rules for Change preposition
to make
the
better future. Correct article usage
a
For example
, after the industrial revolution child labour was abolished only because the entire Globe united across the table which significantly reduced to a greater extend
. Since the problem is affecting the whole globe it is important to have global discussions for Replace the word
extent
the
adequate solution.
Correct article usage
an
On the other hand
, by
implementing the idea which is developed globally should be Change preposition
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Correct article usage
a prioriety
prioriety
. Because it is Correct your spelling
priority
prime
Correct article usage
the prime
ministers
duty to involve the citizens unite together to fight the battle against the sustainable development authorities to visualise the situation and Change noun form
minister's
need to
provide adequate solutions. For Verb problem
apply
an
instance, In India Correct article usage
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agricultural land reform act
was passed several years ago Correct your spelling
Agricultural Land Reform Act
this
is to make sure agricultural area is utilised for farming. Development is necessary however
, it should not be harming
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harm
the
society.
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apply
To sum up
, I believe that people should also
involve
in these kind Wrong verb form
be involved
or
reforms to protect Correct your spelling
of
the
nature because it is the right of each and every one to live Correct article usage
apply
the
planet Change preposition
on the
earth
for that steps has to be taken internationally Capitalize word
Earth
similarly
nationallyCorrect word choice
and similarly
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