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Some people believe that it is wrong to keep animals in zoos, while others think that zoos are both entertaining and ecologically important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people in society think that keeping
animals
 in amusement
parks
/ safari
parks
 is wrong, whilst others argued that
zoos
 play a vital role in entertainment and an eco-friendly
environment
.
This
 essay agrees with the fact that these animal
parks
 are significant for the enjoyment as well as sustainability
environment
. Certainly, all living organisms have a right to live freely without any barriers. In different parts of the world, different breeds of
animals
 are captured from forests and presented in various
zoos
. These
animals
 are used for research purposes. Experiments are done to find the reactions of new-invented medicines, which often result in the death of precious animal lives.
Moreover
, these types of places are only a source of income and profits.
For instance
, in Pakistan, the majority of the unique species are suffering from a lack of water, food, nutrition and an adequate
environment
. According to a recent report in daily dawn, White lions kept in the safari park in Karachi died due to inadequate
environment
 and shortage of food supply. These are the primary reasons people think it is wrong to keep
animals
 in
zoos
.
This
 zoo provides benefits to endangered species, to protect and save them from being killed and vanishing completely from the earth. According to a recent study done in Australia, due to
wildfire's
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 precious breeds of koalas and kangaroos dying,
and
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small populations can be transferred to suitable
parks
 to safeguard them.
Nevertheless
, entertainment and biological diversity can be obtained through
zoos
, many schools organize events for students to observe and visualize a plethora of
animals
 and their man-made habitats. Children like to feed and play with
animals
 in the zoo. In conclusion, there is
the
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mixed opinion from people around the world,
however
, I believe the
animals
 in the zoo provide a sort of fun to families and friends and relief from the monotony of life.
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