Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

First

of all, In

this

World there are many

families

whose

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who

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have sufficient

activities

or obligations in

your

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their

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lives, it's for

this

reason that they don't have

time

to spend with their

children

for many grounds,

for

example

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,example

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your jobs, or maybe because they travel a lot,

also

there are

families

who like to live with their

children

or do some

activities

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, for example,

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for

example

they go to the cinema or if it's

posible

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possible

that they can play

differents

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different

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games,

moreover

this

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this activity

these activities

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activities

are very hilarious and interesting because you are sharing great moments with your family.

However

each family is very

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varying

varing

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caring

varying

in

your

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their

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time

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, for example,

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for

example

I prefer to use that

time

doing things together that are related to schoolwork,

also

we can go

the

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to the

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park or another place that I like

is

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apply

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going to

park

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the park

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,

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apply

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because

this

place

is very relax

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is very relaxing

is very relaxed

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and

also

you can see the nature of the World,

this

is the reason that I like sharing with my family

Also

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there are

families

that your parents don't have a lot of

time

to spend with their

children

, and these people prefer that their

children

can have fun with

others

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other

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things

for

example

games or sports,

this

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these

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activities

are very interesting but it is not the same In my

opinion

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,opinion

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In

this

World

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,World

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there are

families

that prefer

be

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to be

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with their

children

or the parent don't have

a

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apply

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time

and they decide to buy exciting things but that's not

happiness

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happy

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in their lives