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To meet the growing need for food to support an increasing population, a country should make use of edible insects as a food source. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but harvesting them will also negatively affect nature. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects?

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As the world population is skyrocketing, it has been more difficult to cope with a lack of food, which causes people to suffer from starvation across the world.
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,
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 are introduced as an important method to solve severe famine at the moment, and
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 in the future.
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, there are both pros and cons to
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 matter.
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 with, there are advantages accruing from harvesting
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 as food.
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 and foremost, it certainly takes a smaller amount of spending and time than farming animals that have been normally consumed like cows, pigs and chickens. What we benefit from
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 is that if we could make good use of
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 as a food supply, we will be able to deal with not only climate change
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 believed to be led to emitting carbon dioxide from animals that we consume like cows, but
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 in that they contain plenty of protein.
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, despite the benefits mentioned above, drawbacks should be considered.
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, since
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 look somewhat different from what we usually eat, there would be a high chance of them being refused by the public.
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, what is important is that we cannot precisely expect an increase in the number of
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. The number of edible
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 could be grossly inflated for some reason
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 yet to be discovered.
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 unexpected figure might ironically harm both humanity and nature. In conclusion, even though there are some disadvantages to
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 issue, I think that it is an unavoidable trend in the near future and
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 believe that increased intake of
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 will help us to alleviate many problems we are now facing.
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