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Nowadays young people mostly learn by reading books or watching movies and TV shows ,rather than personal experience. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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There is a controversy among many people of
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present-day teenagers are more likely to study knowledge through books and moves. I completely disagree with
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 due to the revolution of employment and the need for a
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 and foremost,
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recovery
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the
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 revolution caused by the rapid development of the world’s economy is one of the major reasons, which has been leading to the transfer of the new generation
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 force. Indeed, most of company and
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enterprise
enterprises
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 various fields is employing
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 with the requirement of strong practical experience not only for the most immediate productive effect
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 but
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 for the protection of exorbitant
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facilities
facilites
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 and infrastructure. Convincingly, many universities and colleges now
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 traditional theory lessons mixed up with practical courses and
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marden
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modern
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convenient
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, a survey conducted in 2018 in Vietnam shows that 67% of employee possesses at least two years of real experience
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 different positions in plenty of working environments.
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,
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graduates
 in
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modern
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 century desire a good salary cause hardly they can accept a limited income which is inconsistent with the valuable time and, costly tertiary fees that they have to pay
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. And to my mind,
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 is an understandable demand due to the fact that after completing
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 education degree,
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loads
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 of a family have to wrestle to afford
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the student's loons.
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,
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 trend could bring a
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beneficial
benefical
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beneficial
 influence
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 the economical development of a specific nation. To recapitulate, I do agree of at students
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 are internalizing more practical skills
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 work thanks to the change
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 working requirements and the high salary.
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