In many countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, it
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more popular in many areas of the world to notice restrictions regarding smoking in public spaces and that smokers need to leave closed spaces if they wish to light up a cigarette. In my personal point of view, I completely agree with these rules and
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elaborate on my opinion in the following paragraphs.
To begin
with, smoking in closed spaces exposes the whole population to the risk of passive smoking.
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, when a person smokes near others, he/she emits dangerous substances that non-smokers inhale unconsciously, which can lead to serious respiratory problems. To illustrate, many recent studies on
issue proved that the exposition to passive smoking increases the risk of asthma and lung cancer.
, it is beneficial to restrict smoking in closed areas, especially in crowded places.
, making smoking illegal in public areas has many other benefits,
as the protection of others, particularly kids who are fragile and need to be protected against illnesses by promoting a healthy environment.
, forcing smokers to go outside in order to light
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a cigarette might have a positive impact on them as well, making them lazier and
a drop in the rates of smoking might be noticed.
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, the company I work for restricted smoking in the office and many employees gave up on smoking because of these rules
others lowered their consumption of nicotine. To summarize, I personally claim that smoking should be restricted in public places, especially closed ones, in order to protect the
health of non-smokers, taking into consideration the wellness of kids , and
to lower the rates of consumption of nicotine among smokers.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondhand smoke
  • respiratory problems
  • cardiovascular disease
  • clean air
  • public health
  • hospital admissions
  • economic benefits
  • smoking cessation
  • cultural shift
  • healthcare costs
  • smoke-free laws
  • enforcement
  • designated smoking areas
  • compliance
  • social attitudes
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