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You recently took a long vacation. In your absence, a friend did you a huge favor. Write a letter thanking your friend. In your letter: Explain what the favor was Describe how this favor helped you Offer compensation Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ___,

#vacation #absence #friend #favor #offer #compensation #addresses #___
Dear Sammy, How are you? Hope my letter finds you well my friend. I haven'
t
 had the chance to thank you for the past 3 weeks, so I wanted to write you a letter. Taking care of my lovely dog meant the world to me as I
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 only leave him with someone I
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 trust. As you might have become aware, he is rather picky when it comes to humans and requires a lot of patience. Let me tell you, those days off really
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 the trick, I'm so well-rested! It couldn'
t
 have happened without you though. I went to the spa pretty much every day and ate a lot of different foods. It was a great holiday that was due for a long time and I was able to enjoy it because of you.
That is
 why I would like to give you something in return. I know you won'
t
 accept any money so I decided to take you out for dinner at a fancy restaurant. I won'
t
 take no for an answer, so you better accept at once. Let me know which day would work for you. Love, Tom
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task response
The letter effectively responds to the task by thanking the friend, explaining the favor, describing its impact, and offering compensation as per the prompt.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriate, and the letter maintains a good structure and flow, but some paragraphs could be more cohesive. Consider using transition words or phrases to improve coherence.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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