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Nowadays, many old buildings could be found in cities. Do you think the advantages of preserving old buildings outweigh the disadvantages?

#buildings #cities
It is increasingly common for the current people to hold diverse views concerning the
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 of
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ancient
manufactures
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. Some of them believe those acts could carry our traditional civilization from
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history while others are against that point.
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, I tend to support the former point since those so-called old-fashioned
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constructions
construction
 are what
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displays
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 our culture and
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makes
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 us different from others. It is evident that those buildings could enhance the local dwellers' income
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 some commercial activities
such
 as selling the local cuisine owing to the rising tendencies of overseas tourists who might be interested in that of a
country
. Undoubtfully, those old buildings are the best format
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 improving people's cultural confidence
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country
.
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 that you were in a big city like
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Tokyo or New York, you wouldn't see any difference without constructions carrying the history of that
country
. Admittedly, the existence of those ancient
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occupys
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plenty
plant
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plenty
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 should have more value for other things. And the commuting time might be longer for a few young labourers due to the traffic jams.
Fountunately
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 kinds of problems would not exist for a long time if some measures could be taken by the local
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such
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 perspective, albeit the old buildings have some shortages as mentioned, there are always some means to release the burden of that. The function of illustrating history to the world plays a more critical role
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 a
country
's development than those drawbacks.
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