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Companies and individuals, and not governments should pay the bill of pollution. Do you agree or disagree?

#companies #individuals #governments #bill #pollution
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 of
governments
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 the pollution
account
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accounts
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out
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apply
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to be paid by large farms
and
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apply
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as well as
public
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the public
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 . I think that they should do that because of them our
plane
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planet
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, nature , animals and even humans are
suffered
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.
Firstly
 , due to their contaminating actions, many rare species of animals are disappeared. Waste residues of companies which release into the oceans are
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cause
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couse
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cause
 of death of several types of fish .
For instance
, scientists have found that
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clownfish
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clown fish
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clownfish
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 began to vanish. 25 %of them have already died from poisonous chemicals.
Also
, the other is exactly the same part
from
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as
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 plastic. While swimming, they
stuck
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are stuck
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 in these things .
Hence
, they cannot swim in
such
 a position .
Although
,
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 their flock
are
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tried to help them it is futile.
Thus
 , in
this
way
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 their number becomes less and less .
Secondly
, air pollution affects
to
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humanity. If these companies do not stop
to release
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releasing
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 chemical fume people could develop
in
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apply
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various organs. Take
for example
 lungs of a person. If he breathes from
this
 air a range of viruses might
be emerged
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emerge
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 in the cells of their lungs . Even though in the week the person does not feel it in fact they begin to harm .
Next
 week it becomes difficult for him to inhale. If these companies
at
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are at
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this
 rate the person may even die.
Therefore
,
this
have
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 to be prevented in time . In conclusion, in my opinion, it occurred because of us and in order to somehow help
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the environment
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the environment
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environment
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the environment
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 we must pay that bill to the
governments
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government
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.
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