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The constitution of many countries states that people are the only source of power. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Have you participated in politics in any way?

The constitution of many countries declares that the people are the ultimate source of power. I fully agree with
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 principle, as a
nation’s
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 true strength lies in the education, economic productivity, and cultural
values
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 of its citizens.
Although
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 I have never been actively involved in politics, I strongly support the idea that people form the backbone of the state.
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 with, a
nation’s
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 literacy rate plays a decisive role in shaping its global standing. An educated population not only drives innovation but
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 allows for meaningful engagement in international cooperation.
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, the rapid economic rise of South Korea is largely attributed to its highly skilled and educated workforce, which has enabled the country to compete effectively in global markets.
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 demonstrates that the intellectual capacity of citizens directly translates into national strength and influence.
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, cultural
values
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 provide another dimension of power, as they represent a country’s identity to the rest of the world. Traditions, language, and shared heritage foster unity at home
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 projecting soft power abroad. Japan,
for example
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, has significantly enhanced its international reputation through the global reach of its cultural products
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 as literature, cinema, and art.
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 illustrates that citizens not only safeguard cultural integrity but
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 extend their
nation’s
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 influence far beyond its borders. In conclusion, the people of a nation are undeniably its strongest pillars, as their education, economy, and
values
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 define the country’s progress and global reputation.
While
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 I have not participated directly in politics, I firmly believe that by contributing through knowledge and
values
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, individuals like myself can create a lasting positive impact on their
nation’s
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 future.

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coherence
Use more clear link words to show how one idea follows the next. This helps the flow from intro to body and back to conclusion.
content
Add more specific facts or small acts from real life to back each point. This makes the arg ument feel stronger.
structure
Make the opening and closing lines a bit tighter. Restate the main idea and end with a clear line.
lexical
Keep words simple and easy. If you use many new words, be sure to explain them in a simple way.
structure
A clear view is shown from the start.
content
The idea of people as the power is well kept.
content
Examples from real life help the idea.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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