IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7.5

A country’s future depends on its young people. Therefore, a country should invest heavily in its youth. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country’s #future #people #country #youth
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Investing more towards the development of the younger
population
Use synonyms
 of the country is crucial as the future lies with them, while I completely agree with
this
Linking Words
 statement, it is
also
Linking Words
 important to consider the maturity the veterans bring to the table.
Firstly
Linking Words
, teens are the epicentre of any nation, be it a developing or developed economy. The percentage of young
people
Use synonyms
 determines the ability of an economy to perform well in the long run.
For Instance
Linking Words
, India with a seven billion populace has close to 70% teens, whereas Japan
on the other hand
Linking Words
 with a relatively less
population
Use synonyms
 has 20 % teens.
This
Linking Words
 shows the gravity, with which an economy can strive to work towards growth, opportunities and employment.The younger the
population
Use synonyms
, the better the efficiency of an organization that produces quality output. Passion, courage and innovation are what make them unique in every field.
This
Linking Words
 positive effect can
also
Linking Words
 be extrapolated to politics, science, sports and business. With regards to the older
population
Use synonyms
, they are equally responsible for nation-building. The average length of experience of civil servants in developed countries ranges at least from 10 to 15 years. These prominent communities hold the power and growth of the majority of countries across the world. While
this
Linking Words
 is true, it is needless to say every younger person builds an action in his or her field over time.
Hence
Linking Words
, whilst old
people
Use synonyms
 come with a lot of experience they might not bring a unique set of ideas to start with. In conclusion, while old
people
Use synonyms
 can contribute to the nation building as a whole their age may not help in contributing quickly and effectively.
Therefore
Linking Words
, youth
people
Use synonyms
 with new perspectives are the need of the hour for any nation.
Submitted by suni.jntu on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: