In a number of countries some prople think it is necessary to spend large sums of the money on constructing new railway linesfor very fast trains between cities. Otherss believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Public
transport
is one of the major requirements in
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people. Some
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the
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societies think that huge amounts of investment
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made in the
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construction
contruction
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construction
of new railways whereas few others believe that the money should
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for
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improving the available
transportation
.
This
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opinions and will reach
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a conclusion.
Firstly
,
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of new railways where the trains move faster
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would help in the reduction of existing traffic issues.
Additionally
, it supports the idea of extending
transport
to more places so that more people will have access to
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public
transport
.
For example
, in
Dubai
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the metro has
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extended its stations including
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remote places
such
as Dubai investment park and Al Furjan, which made
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public life much smoother.
On the other hand
, the whole process involves
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amount of cash and
this
could drag the country into a crisis
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if there are no sufficient people who could use the fast metro.
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, the government can improve the facilities of existing public
transportation
.
That is
, the authorities could modify the existing system in each country so that they could increase
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human occupancy.
Also
, developments can be made to increase the frequency of available
transportation
.
For instance
, in
Mexico
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the
transportation
sector successfully uplifted the life of the communities by including 10 more routes to the current metro.
However
, these could not be helpful in reducing the time
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by every single person
in
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each train, which marks
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a downside. In my opinion,
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of the country would need
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of new ideas.
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, I believe that
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fast moving
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railways should be constructed as a part of
day to
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day
transport
as it saves
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amount of time.
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  • Prediction or recommendation

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