Essay topics: Many people prefer to spend money and not save it. What are the reasons? Is this a positive or negative development?

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Some
people
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love spending all their earnings rather than saving them for the future.
Such
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behavior
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behaviour
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can
be resulted
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result
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from the belief of living in the present or not being able to use
money
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efficiently. Definitely
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consuming
coming
cosuming
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consuming
all we have is
mischevious
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mischievous
to our sustainability and by doing so
people
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may bring
sufferings
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in the upcoming days of their lives.
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with, a number of
people
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are unaware of the fact that their lives may not be the same in the days afterwards. Since it is not possible to see what tomorrow may bring,
people
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who are in
great
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a great
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position
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today barely think of misfortunes.
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, they continue
on
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apply
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spending their
money
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on things that may not even
necessary
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be necessary
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.
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, buying an expensive pair of shoes to
fulfill
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fulfil
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present
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a present
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desire as s/he is not thinking of any leg injury could be at any time for which
money
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need
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to be saved. Another thing worth mentioning is that despite being aware of the necessity of saving
money
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sometimes
people
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suffer from ill management of their expenses.
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, one may have saved some
money
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through
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by
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avoiding
rickshaw
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a rickshaw
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ride from home to
office
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the office
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while
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but
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he ended up spending two times more
money
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on smoking unknowingly.
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, they fail to save
money
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as they lack control
on
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over
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their habit and expenditures.
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, consuming all one has now is
mischevious
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mischievous
to their sustainability while it is always wise to keep at least a little portion of the salary for the
shake
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sake
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of any future emergencies.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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