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You arranged to visit a friend in Australia but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of the visit. Write a letter to your friend. Write In your letter: -Explain the important event -Apologize for the situation -Suggest a new arrangement

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Dear David, I am writing
this
 letter to express my apologies regarding
cancellation
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the cancellation
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the
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of the
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 scheduled meeting that we had planned before.
To begin
 with, I have to inform you that my daughter has an important exam
that is
 crucial to her. So, I will not be able to travel to Australia next month. As you can probably guess, I should support her for a better result. I would like to ask you sorry that I have to change our plan.
Additionally
, I am willing to announce to you that I am thankful for your patience and understanding in
this
 circumstance that has happened to me. Fortunately, I have enough spare time in October.
Thus
, I prefer to reschedule our appointment. I hope
this
 time I will be able to meet you successfully. I am eagerly looking forward to hearing your response.
Also
, I will wait for your
further
 suggestions. Best Regards, Ali Pazoki
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coherence cohesion
To enhance coherence, you can create a more fluid progression between paragraphs by using connecting words and phrases. This will help your ideas to flow more naturally.
task achievement
Ensure your letter covers all points in more detail, especially about your intentions for the new visit dates. This will provide a more comprehensive response to the task.
coherence cohesion
Try to develop a single clear idea per paragraph for better clarity. This makes your writing easier to follow.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is appropriately polite and courteous, which is suitable for this sort of correspondence.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are well-handled and appropriate for the context of the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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