Some people believe that best way to produce happier society is to insure that there are only small difference between the richest and poorest members. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Individuals think that the ideal
way
to make a joyful community is to make sure that there is no gap between the
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wealthy
and poorest
members
.
However
, I agree with the
statement
.
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essay should give your personal point of view and the contrary as well.
To begin
with, I support
this
idea because of several reasons.
firstly
,
people
have to treat same
way
to rich and poorest
members
of
society
.
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,
people
give
same
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amount of respect to
the
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people
who
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poor and needy.
this
small bring
a
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bring
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happiness
among the poor
people
because
society
will treat them in
same
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way
to
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both
status
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.
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, In America,
people
treat everyone with the same kind of and
also
does
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not give
a
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special treatment to any celebrity.
Furthermore
,
people
agree with the
statement
that there is a miner
difference
between wealthy and middle-class
members
of the community.I would like to outline one more impact which brings joy to
society
. Government to arrange the house category together of wealthy and poor
members
of our community.
In other words
, there is no
a
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specific area for the rich in our
society
.
society
should arrange
such
as one house
of
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poor
people
and the
next
is of rich ones.
For example
,In Canada, government give a pass the that there is a specific area for poor
people
and rich
people
and they both lives
to
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together.
On the other hand
, some
people
disagree with the
statement
that
this
small
difference
cannot bring
happiness
to
the
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society
.
Secondly
, no one can finish the
difference
between the poor and rich
people
, but they can provide
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loans
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to
poor
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the poor
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to start their
business
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businesses
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.
In other words
, banks can provide
people
with loans to give them financial support with zero interest.
people
have
to
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support by giving loans that poor
people
can
also
stand in front of rich
members
.
For instance
, In
pakistan
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, ministers give zero interest
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to everyone.
who's
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salaries
below
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than
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1 lac
pakistan
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rupres
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rupees
.
Moreover
,
people
total disagree with the
statement
because
bring
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happiness
among
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the
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society
cannot
be
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come from
kill
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the
difference
between rich and
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poor
poors
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poor
people
.
society
provide
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well education to poor children. all the uneducated poor children get
good
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education, so they can make their lifestyle better and better.
For instance
, In India,
government
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the government
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announced that education is free for poor
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child
childs
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children
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in
the
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society
.
lastly
, some believe that the perfect
way
to produce
happiness
in
society
is to ensure that there is less
difference
between poor and rich
members
. I agree with the
statement
because
people
have to treat the poor in the same
way
and there is no specific area for rich
people
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic equality
  • wealth disparity
  • redistributive policies
  • income inequality
  • government intervention
  • societal well-being
  • historical examples
  • economic diversity
  • innovation and growth
  • overall happiness
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