Despite health warnings, a large number of people continue to smoke all over the world. Why should we be concerned about this? What solutions would you suggest?
There is no doubt these days that smoking become very a common habit. The question is, why we should be concerned about
this
and what the
methods could be Correct article usage
apply
solve
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to solve
this
phenomenon
? In this
essay
I am going to discuss the effects of smoking and how to solve Add a comma
,essay
this
phenomenon
.
In terms of problems, smoking cause
serious issues Change the verb form
causes
on
Change preposition
in
the
health and Correct article usage
apply
the
financial status. Correct article usage
apply
Firstly
, cigarettes contain toxic materials impact
negatively on Correct pronoun usage
that impact
body
, in Add an article
the body
fact
the rate incident of sudden death among young people is strongly Add a comma
,fact
association
with Replace the word
associated
presence
of Add an article
the presence
neocatine
in Correct your spelling
nicotine
body
. Add an article
the body
Secondly
, when they are
smoke release Unnecessary verb
apply
the
toxic materials Correct article usage
apply
on
Change preposition
into
air
, which lead to pollution and impact negatively Correct article usage
the air
non-smoker
. Fix the agreement mistake
non-smokers
Moreover
, these habits and Correct article usage
the addictive
addictive
to Replace the word
addiction
buy
cigarettes daily base leads to Wrong verb form
buying
lose
Change the verb form
losing
money
. Change preposition
of money
Therefore
, smoking is worse
habit Correct article usage
a worse
could
destroy their lung, money and our environment.
Correct pronoun usage
that could
No
Add the punctuation
,No
Correct your spelling
one
on
can deny the fact of Correct your spelling
one
negative
impacts of smoking, Correct article usage
the negative
however
, what is the appropriate measure could
Correct pronoun usage
that could
assesst
to solve Correct your spelling
assess
assist
this
phenomenon
.
Governments should Change the punctuation
?
be
Unnecessary verb
apply
emphasis
on several Add an article
an emphasis
regulation
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regulations
such
as raise
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raising
the
prices and Correct article usage
apply
limited
Replace the word
limiting
place
Fix the agreement mistake
places
that
allowed Correct determiner usage
the
for
smoking. Change preposition
of
In other words
, some people when they find the prices increase may it will help them to stop buy
it. Limited places that allowed smoking Change the form of the verb
buying
also
could be solution
. Add an article
the solution
a solution
For example
, prohibited smoking in public area
and closed restaurants and any places Fix the agreement mistake
areas
have
children inside Correct pronoun usage
that have
it
. Correct pronoun usage
them
Moreover
, increase
awareness about the risk of smoking as research Wrong verb form
increasing
evident
could be the best method to stop smoking habits. To be more specific, Replace the word
evidence
person
Correct article usage
a person
when
Correct word choice
who
understand
consequences Change the verb form
understanding
it
will help to Correct pronoun usage
apply
rethinking
about certain behaviour.
In conclusion, it is evident that smoking brings sickness and poor Change the verb form
rethink
for
Change preposition
to
Add an article
the smoker
a smoker
smoker
. Government ensure steps are taken to prevent Fix the agreement mistake
smokers
this
phenomenon
from deteriorating future.Submitted by hanan.daghash on
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