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The government has announced that it plans to build a new university. Some people think that your community would be a good place to locate the university. Compare the advantages and disadvantages of establishing a new university in your community. Use specific details in your discussion.

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I think it is a great idea to build a new
university
 in my
community
.
However
, I think it is a controversial question whether the building of a new educational institution will bring only benefits to our society. In
this
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 I will analyze the advantages and
disadvantages
 of
this
 issue and present my view in favour of establishing a new
university
 in my public.
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 one side, establishing a new academy in my
community
 brings many benefits.
First
 of all,
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new construction means more job opportunities. I think it would be good for my
community
 because many
people
 have to spend much time driving to their work day in and day out because they could not find a job in our neighbourhood.
Second
 of all, a new academy is a good
chance
 to meet new
people
 and I like
this
 opportunity. Many students will live in our
community
.
Finally
, if a new
university
 is built in my association there is a big
chance
 that I will be willing to enrol in it. I think it is great because it is not far from my place and I do not have to move to another part of the city. Another important aspect of
this
 is that
people
 from my
community
 will have a
chance
 to use the new libraries and facilities of a new
university
. For ,example some
people
 can take courses and classes there.
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 the other side, building a new
university
 can bring some
disadvantages
. New construction means noise, traffic jams and different kinds of pollution.
In addition
 to these
disadvantages
,
much
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 young societies in our
community
 can cause more noise
especially
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 in the evenings. To sum up, I think that I would support the decision of the government of establishing a new
university
 in my
community
 despite a few
disadvantages
 that could follow
this
 construction. I believe that a new
university
 will increase
a
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chance
 of many young
people
 getting a higher education, and gaining more knowledge and experience, which will help them to succeed in today’s world.
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