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The government has announced that it plans to build a new university. Some people think that your community would be a good place to locate the university. Compare the advantages and disadvantages of establishing a new university in your community. Use specific details in your discussion.

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I think it is a great idea to build a new
university
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 in my
community
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.
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, I think it is a controversial question whether the building of a new educational institution will bring only benefits to our society. In
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 I will analyze the advantages and
disadvantages
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 of
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 issue and present my view in favour of establishing a new
university
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 in my public.
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 one side, establishing a new academy in my
community
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 brings many benefits.
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 of all,
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new construction means more job opportunities. I think it would be good for my
community
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 because many
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 have to spend much time driving to their work day in and day out because they could not find a job in our neighbourhood.
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 of all, a new academy is a good
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 to meet new
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 and I like
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 opportunity. Many students will live in our
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.
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, if a new
university
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 is built in my association there is a big
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 that I will be willing to enrol in it. I think it is great because it is not far from my place and I do not have to move to another part of the city. Another important aspect of
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 is that
people
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 from my
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 will have a
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 to use the new libraries and facilities of a new
university
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. For ,example some
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 can take courses and classes there.
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 the other side, building a new
university
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 can bring some
disadvantages
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. New construction means noise, traffic jams and different kinds of pollution.
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 to these
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,
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 young societies in our
community
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 can cause more noise
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 in the evenings. To sum up, I think that I would support the decision of the government of establishing a new
university
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 in my
community
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 despite a few
disadvantages
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 that could follow
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 construction. I believe that a new
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 will increase
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chance
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 of many young
people
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 getting a higher education, and gaining more knowledge and experience, which will help them to succeed in today’s world.
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