Some believe that the best way to stay fit is to join a gym or health club while others think doing everyday activities. Such as walking and climbing stairs is enough. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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recent days,
fitness
arose as a priority act due to
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increasing lifestyle diseases.
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, the ways to achieve
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fitness
are always a debatable
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.
Some one
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thinks that doing
gym
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the gym
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or other specific
activities
are
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is
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necessary to maintain
healthy
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a healthy
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body
, whereas on the other side
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believe
that
the
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regular
activities
like walking, climbing stairs etc. make them fit.
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upcoming
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I shall discuss and analyse both of these views and outline where the factual scenario stands.
To begin
with , I will discuss the analysis of the health conditions; Those who are doing
the
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specific
activities
such
as yoga or gym based on the recent studies and
experience
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experiences
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of the people. Specific always help to make people fit, but
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someone
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some one
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someone
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always
need
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to ensure the specific
exercise
they are practising
to match
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with
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their
body
. If it is not doing so, it may make an adverse effect.
Recent
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study published in TImes illustrated that
the
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regular physical
activities
like gym,
jogging
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and jogging
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is
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necessary
necesssary
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necessary
to become fit,
although
10 %
facing
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some
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issue
issues
isssue
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issues
due to inappropriate
exercise
selection with respect to their
body
conditions. Overall,
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appropriate
approprite
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appropriate
and controlled
exercise
could bring
the
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fitness
.
On the other hand
, the question is
realy
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really
regular
activities
are sufficient enough to become healthy. Those who are saying that normal act would be fine enough,
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claim
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that while doing walking or doing other
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jon
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jobs
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home
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also
helps to burn
the
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fat and increase the rate of metabolic
activities
.The recent study published in the article New World is supporting
this
fact. The study displayed how
the
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regular
activities
works
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to maintain
healthy
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. In my
opinion
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along with regular
activities
controlled and
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appropriate
appropraiate
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appropriate
exercise
would be necessary to maintain
the
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fitness
. In conclusion, the factual case stands between both of these views. To make a fit
body
, we need to do regular
activities
and some
exercise
.
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