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Nowadays animal experiments are now widely used to develop new drugs and test the safety of other products. Some people argue that these experiments should be banned because it is morally wrong to cause suffering to animals, while others advocate them because of their benefits to humanity. discuss both views and give your opinion?

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Controversial experiments are being used on
animals
 to develop new
drugs
 and certain industries have made millions of dollars over the years. Despite the intention to bring hope to humanity, many
people
 are opposed to causing suffering to the lives of
animals
.
On the other hand
, part of the population defends the idea that it is the only way to create new
drugs
 to treat diseases. An article written by the New York Times said that there are many groups around the world advocating that these experiments should be banned because it is morally wrong and another way to try new
drugs
 must be found. Considering the suffering of
animals
, it could be possible to identify the possibility of testing new
drugs
 only in mice bred in laboratories. Of course, it would be a way to protect
animals
 born in the wild. Still, rewed scientists have argued that using
animals
 to test new products can save millions of
people
 per year around the world, and they fully understand those who advocate that
animals
 don't suffer.
However
, a doctor gave a recent example where all
people
 around the world were eagerly waiting for a new vaccine against Covid 19. In fact,
people
 waited almost two years to get a vaccine. My take on
this
 should be to propose that animal experimentation be used only if it is really necessary and to abruptly stop animal testing by the Beauty Industries that
causes
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 the same feeling in
animals
. In conclusion, there is no right side to
this
 controversial argument, but it is possible to reduce the problems surrounding animal suffering. In fact, it is cruelty and anyone who defends another position must continue fighting to end the immoral experiments used on
animals
, but never stop thinking about the health of humanity as well.
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