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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The invention of the Internet has had negative effects on your civilization. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

#invention #internet #effects #civilization #support
Nowadays, the
internet
have
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a
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 important contribution
in
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to
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 our
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lives
life's
lifes
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lives
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 and actually now because the pandemic affected many
people
 in the world with
works
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work
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, classes and some industries, and now with the
internet
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,internet
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 we can have one opportunity because
we
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apply
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can
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learn
learnd
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learn
in
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on
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internet
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the internet
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 and work with the same
also
 we can generate
now
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new
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 jobs in the
internet
,
however
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 we must be careful with the use of
internet
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the internet
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,
although
 the real question is can the
internet
 really
affectet
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affected
affect
 society?
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First
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Fist
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First
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, the
internet
 is a tool, which collects information of various kinds, thanks to which we can be informed about many things in the
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world
wolrd
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world
.
However
,
this
 information can
also
 be
also be
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false, many times
people
 find the famous "Fake News" that
are
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 used for disinformation.
In addition
, the
internet
 and social media are widely used today,
many
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people
 create and share content they like.
On the other hand
, being consequences
such
 as being exposed or judged,
for example
, if a
youtuber
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YouTuber
Youtuber
 gives a wrong opinion on a controversial topic, it will create another controversy and
people
 will start attacking him for what he said or did, another topic is that some
people
 lose the time in the
internet
 with social media or some videos by youtube,
tiktok
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TikTok
 or trovo. As far as I
know
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,know
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 the
internet
 can be very bad for society if it is not used well,
internet
 freedom can be a double-edged sword and the most damaged are the
people
 who don 't know how the
internet
 world works.
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