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How frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants beween 2003 and 2013

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The bar chart shows information about the fast food eating habits of the population in the united states from 2003 to 2013. Overall, what stands out from the graph is that most
people
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 once a week or once or twice a month eat fast food at
restaurants
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 during the given period. Looking into the details, in 2003 around 31% of
people
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 eat fast food in
restaurants
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 once a week and
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percentage
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 increased to 33% in 2006 while in 2013
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percentage
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 decreased by 5%.
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, in 2003 30% of
people
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 eat once or twice a month in
restaurants
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 but there is a decrease of 5% in
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percentage
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 in 2006. while in 2013, there was a sharp increase in
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 trend and touched its peak at 33%.
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 to that, about 17% of
people
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 eat several times a week in 2003 but in 2006
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percentage
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 increased to 20% while
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percentage
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 decreased by 4% in 2013. If we look into a few times a year group
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 around 13% of
people
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 in 2003 eat a few times a year in
restaurants
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 but for 2006 and 2013
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percentage
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 was the same at 15%. Less than 5% of
people
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 eat every day or never eat in
restaurants
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 in 2003, 2006 and 2013.
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