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some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers should be required to work in the country where they did their training. others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. discuss both these views and give your own opinion

individuals think that
experts
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,
such
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 as
doctors
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 and
engineers
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 should be required to
work
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 in the
nation
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 where they did their training. other whilst believe they should provide them
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with a
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a
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the
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 freedom to
work
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 in different
countries
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 if they dream.In
this
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 should discuss
both
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the
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apply
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sides and give your personal point of view .
To begin
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 with,
people
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 think that
experts
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 of
doctors
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 and
engineers
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 reserve their service for their
nation
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.
firstly
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,
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experts
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expert
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doctors
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 and IT
engineers
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is
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are
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 most important for
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nation
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the nation
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 because they
both
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 are the
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backbone
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back bone
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backbone
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 of the
nation
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.
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,
countries
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 are basically based on two occupations which
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doctors
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are doctors
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 and
engineers
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. anyone
of
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in
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country
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the country
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need
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needs
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the
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apply
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experts
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expert's
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doctors
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 and
engineers
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.it
play
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plays
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virtual
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a virtual
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 role
among
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in
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 the
nation
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.
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, In Pakistan, they do
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an agreement
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agreement
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agreements
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 with IT
engineers
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 and
doctors
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 that they cannot leave their
nation
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.
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,
people
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 think that
professional
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professionals
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,
such
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 as
doctors
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 and computer
engineer
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engineers
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 should require to
work
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 in
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country
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the country
a country
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 where they did
there
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their
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 house
job
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jobs
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.
people
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 think that they gain all the information and consume all the facilities of
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country
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the country
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, so it is a time to duty for their where they did training.
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,
people
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 believe that
doctors
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 and
engineers
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 consume all the facilities, but they have to give duty
for
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to
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 their
nation
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.
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, my cousins
who
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live in Canada. he was planning to come back to
pakistan
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Pakistan
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 because he is
high
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a high
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 qualified doctor, but Canada does not allow him to go back to
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nation
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the nation
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. To contrary, others think that they should give them
a
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freedom to
work
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 in
different
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a different
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country
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countries
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.
doctors
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 and engineer change with
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country
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the country
a country
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 because of better lifestyles. In
another words
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another word
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, they
both
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 consider
to change
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changing
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 their
nation
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 because many
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country
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countries
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offering
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offer
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 them
to
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apply
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better lifestyles.
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, My aunty was a doctor in America, but she changed his
country
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 because of better lifestyles.
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Furthermore
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Furthermore
,
people
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 think that
doctors
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 and
engineer
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engineers
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 should be free to
work
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 in another
nation
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. they
both
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 change with their
nation
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 because they can get high paid
job
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jobs
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 in different
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country
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countries
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 and
nationality
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nationalities
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.
doctors
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 and
engineers
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 most leave their
countries
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 because salaries are high and
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country
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the country
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also
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offer
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offers
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 their nationality. To illustrate, My friend recent leave
pakistan
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Pakistan
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 because he got
offer
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an offer
the offer
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 from Canada. they
also
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giving
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give
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 him
a
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apply
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double
of
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apply
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his salary. to sum up,some think that
experts
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,
such
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 as
doctors
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 and IT
engineers
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 should
work
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 for
their
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the
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nation
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 where they did all
studies
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their studies
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. others think that they should be free to
work
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 in different
countries
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. In my opinion,
experts
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 should
be require
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be required
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 to
work
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 for
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nation
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the nation
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 and reserve their service. because they
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both
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are both
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experts
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 are
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backbone
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back bone
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backbone
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 of the
nation
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 and they
also
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 take fatality, so it is time to return back to your
nation
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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