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Many people choose to work or live abroad because of the higher standards of living they can find outside their home country. Do you think this brings more advantages or disadvantages to the people who follow this path?

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A number of
people
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 countries outside of their homeland. To somebody settling in a foreign country is a great deal while to others it is not worthwhile at all. Personally, I am in favour of the former and in the subsequent
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i
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 will be discussing my views.
To begin
 with, most
people
 who
goes
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for
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 getting higher studies in any foreign country find wonderful work opportunities there once they achieve their degrees while it is often uncertain to secure a job back in their homeland.
For instance
, many Bangladeshi students who came back from abroad after
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completing
completion
completeing
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completing
 their studies barely received job
offer
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 according to their
qualification
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qualifications
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.
As a result
, they went back
to
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abroad again and got themselves employed there
with
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relatively
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 easy and fair way. Another point worth mentioning is that most of the developed countries offer
secured
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 life to the citizens which
work
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 as a major pull factor to the immigrants as very often these
people
came
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 from countries that are
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war-torn
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war torn
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 or are going
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through
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trough
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 economic crisis and so on.
For instance
, the
Rohingiyas
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Rohingyas
Rohingya
 in Bangladesh who fled away from
Miyanmar
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Myanmar
 due to the oppression by Burmese authorities are feared of going back there in their motherland. They feel more
secured
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 here in Bangladesh and
thus
 want to settle here permanently. To conclude, staying somewhere is a decision that
people
 make mostly on the basis of life security and better job facilities and if a person
find
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 it in a foreign nation
then
 that will definitely make their lives comfortable.
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