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Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that
teenagers
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 should spend their leisure time
to do
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 miscellaneous voluntary
work
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 for their
community
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 which is beneficial to both
of
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the
teenagers
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 and their respective communities. According to my opinion, I strongly
agree
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this
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 viewpoint as it can assist the youths to be
agile
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 and energetic plus to develop various interpersonal skills.
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, the local governments can reduce their yearly estimated cost of doing different
community
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work
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 if adolescents extend their helping hands.
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 idea is that participating in part-time charity projects like gardening or arranging a cycling camp during holidays can boost
up
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the fitness level of
teenagers
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 so that they can be more active and joyous in their regular activities like studying or involving in a pretty specialized task that require more brainstorming.
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, doing voluntary activities give them a chance to interact with different types of
people
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of
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 the
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 which definitely assists them to grow numerous social skills like active listening and emotional intelligence that can have an impact on their future life.
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community
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 can
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 be benefitted from
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 unpaid
work
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. During
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 era of economic depression, when most
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the
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people
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 are trying to save their income for upcoming hunger and recession, they usually pay
least
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 attention to less important
staffs
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 like donating food and clothes to the poor. Local
teenagers
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 can extend their helping hands in
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 aspect. They can collect dry food and their own plus their parent’s unused clothes in a proper manner. After that, they can provide those to the needy
people
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 living in slums and
suburb
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 areas. In
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 way, they can help to save a lot of money these
people
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 could spend
for
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 their food and clothing. To recapitulate, I absolutely believe that
teenagers
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 should take part in voluntary
community
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work
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 in their idle time for themselves plus society’s betterment.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • required
  • unpaid
  • community work
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • life skills
  • volunteering
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • socially aware
  • responsible
  • interact
  • diverse backgrounds
  • cultural understanding
  • tolerance
  • work experience
  • essential skills
  • employment
  • interests
  • passions
  • career development
  • contribute
  • betterment
  • development
  • local community
  • mental well-being
  • stress
  • self-esteem
  • burden
  • academic
  • personal lives
  • time management
  • support
  • balance
  • participate
  • encouraged
  • numerous benefits
  • individuals
  • conclusion
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