Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might a lot of money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy?

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poor, but later, after strong
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they
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material life is highest.
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people now, how to be
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rich
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poor. And they
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objective on
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a
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positive emotions, you can have
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stability,
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because it
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you
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opportunity
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that
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disorder. Today, we now, medical services are paid,
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opportunities you can solve problems without stress.
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not decide with money. It is a
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someone, friendship, and just sympathy.
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quality depends on
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and human consciousness.
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a person happy can be with
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for his birthday, just
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a flower, saying
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and all thinks when
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a grate well emotions. In
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a want to say to be
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happy depends
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the person himself.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial security
  • Basic needs
  • Comfort
  • Luxury
  • Freedom
  • Altruistic
  • Philanthropy
  • Nurturing relationships
  • Fulfillment
  • Sense of accomplishment
  • Physical well-being
  • Spiritual beliefs
  • Community involvement
  • Gratitude
  • Mindfulness
  • Simple pleasures
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