Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that government and individuals can tackle these problem

Nowadays more and more
people
are moving towards urban
areas
from rural
areas
for better
lifestyle
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and education.
Consequently
, it leads to various problems. In
this
essay, we will discuss the problems and solutions, that authorities and
people
take to solve the issue.
To begin
with,
first
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problem is
lack
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the lack
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of resources. Due to
increased
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population,
people
suffer from housing and
lack
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a lack
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of food materials. Due to
over congestion
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, they do not have
sufficient
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a sufficient
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place
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places
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to live in.
For example
, in
Mumbai
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,Mumbai
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the place of
two bedroom
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apartment
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apartments
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is around 20 million, and it is suggested to increase in
coming
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decades. To solve
this
,
government
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should increase the basic fundamental necessities
such
as shelter, food and water. The
second
problem is unemployment and traffic congestion.
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in the crowd leads to
heavy
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traffic which
disturbes
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disturbs
disturbed
the regular routine. Many
people
do not have a proper job and suffer a lot to
fulfill
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their requirements.
For instance
, the roads in London are well developed, doors of houses directly open to the road. The local authorities should take
necessary
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steps to improve public transportation and roads. It should be kept in the mind
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government
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to provide more jobs . The
third
problem is pollution. Many
people
suffer from various diseases due to pollution
such
as malaria,
cholera
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and cholera
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.
For example
,
people
in Delhi suffer from illness due to poor drainage and lack of maintenance. The organization should take necessary steps, to make underground drainage to improve the life and health of
people
. To recapitulate,
people
in rural
areas
should be provided with proper education and basic facilities which in turn decrease the migration of
people
to urban
areas
.
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