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Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that government and individuals can tackle these problem

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Nowadays more and more
people
 are moving towards urban
areas
 from rural
areas
 for better
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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 and education.
Consequently
, it leads to various problems. In
this
 essay, we will discuss the problems and solutions, that authorities and
people
 take to solve the issue.
To begin
 with,
first
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 problem is
lack
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the lack
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 of resources. Due to
increased
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the increased
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 population,
people
 suffer from housing and
lack
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a lack
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 of food materials. Due to
over congestion
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, they do not have
sufficient
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a sufficient
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place
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places
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 to live in.
For example
, in
Mumbai
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,Mumbai
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 the place of
two bedroom
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apartment
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apartments
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 is around 20 million, and it is suggested to increase in
coming
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the coming
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 decades. To solve
this
,
government
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 should increase the basic fundamental necessities
such
 as shelter, food and water. The
second
 problem is unemployment and traffic congestion.
Increase
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 in the crowd leads to
heavy
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the heavy
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 traffic which
disturbes
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disturbs
disturbed
 the regular routine. Many
people
 do not have a proper job and suffer a lot to
fulfill
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fulfil
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 their requirements.
For instance
, the roads in London are well developed, doors of houses directly open to the road. The local authorities should take
necessary
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 steps to improve public transportation and roads. It should be kept in the mind
of
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government
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the government
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 to provide more jobs . The
third
 problem is pollution. Many
people
 suffer from various diseases due to pollution
such
 as malaria,
cholera
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and cholera
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.
For example
,
people
 in Delhi suffer from illness due to poor drainage and lack of maintenance. The organization should take necessary steps, to make underground drainage to improve the life and health of
people
. To recapitulate,
people
 in rural
areas
 should be provided with proper education and basic facilities which in turn decrease the migration of
people
 to urban
areas
.
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